I don't think these work as well as your previous 6. I would say focus less on literal representation, your strongest pieces in the other series were the ones that hinted at a shape but did it in an elegant way. These shapes are too elementary and straightforward. I think the strongest piece here is the two U curves but I'm not sure what sound they are. Again, I would try to focus more on shape and try cropping and breaking the borders of the page.
I don't think these work as well as your previous 6. I would say focus less on literal representation, your strongest pieces in the other series were the ones that hinted at a shape but did it in an elegant way. These shapes are too elementary and straightforward. I think the strongest piece here is the two U curves but I'm not sure what sound they are. Again, I would try to focus more on shape and try cropping and breaking the borders of the page.
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ReplyDeleteWhat are the 5 sounds you are trying to represent?
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